Friday, May 14, 2021

Ancient Creature

 

                                
 I am focussing on being a communicator and being able to share my ideas through writing.  My focus was to share my ideas by making it interesting and easy to read.  
use a variety of sentence starters and I used a couple of similes to describe the creature to the readers and my sentence starters make my writing interesting.
I need to work on adding more description to my writing and I will do that by learning more ways to write descriptively.  

1 comment:

  1. Hi Jodi, its Holly from Mangapapa school. I loved the way you used a lot of great adjectives, it paints a picture inside my head.
    My favorite bit in you're writing was when you said "It was standing there with broken arms, a stretched out eddy bear face and it said I am your doom!" Next time you could add a background and, and maybe change the font.

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